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Engaging by ~boundlessgravity:iconboundlessgravity:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Philosophical > Open






not always honey.

sometimes, I hear them think
maybe when we die
we leave our love behind,
like a pair of sandals at
the beginning of a beach.

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*sound of tuvan throat singing*

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*anarchypress Nov 18, 2005, 7:12:27 AM
I think it kind of wanders a bit at the beginning, but the final four lines are riveting.

~M

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~bluwyndfaerie Nov 18, 2005, 8:32:24 AM
I really enjoyed the poem. It has nice images, a nice feel. The ending is very strong, as the first reviewer said.

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"We are prophets of a future not our own."
~ Oscar Romero
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~halcyonapperception Nov 18, 2005, 10:27:41 AM
I'm learning the art of tuvan throat singing at the moment. I've almost got my Khoomei. Almost.
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~originill Nov 18, 2005, 1:56:30 PM
they don't believe me.

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my enemy said to me, "love your enemy."
and i obeyed him and loved myself. gibran
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~McClelland Nov 18, 2005, 5:13:39 PM
Egyptian Ratscrew was one of my favorite games in high school.

Love the metaphors, especially the last four lines. I feel like you're branching out a bit, this is different than your usual poetry. But I'm okay with it. Let's make a deal: keep writing, I'll keep reading.
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~boundlessgravity Nov 18, 2005, 6:10:24 PM
but you won't let those robots defeat me?


Yoshimi?

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Your humbleness is showing:
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~originill Nov 19, 2005, 5:52:33 AM
right on. she's takin' lotsa vitamins.

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my enemy said to me, "love your enemy."
and i obeyed him and loved myself. gibran
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~boundlessgravity Nov 19, 2005, 2:46:18 PM
:handshake:

:cuddle:

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Your humbleness is showing:
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~boundlessgravity Nov 19, 2005, 2:53:12 PM
:lmao:

Tough, right? I've been trying to teach myself for awhile now. I've got six overtones above the drone, but I've a hard time making melodies with them, at this point. There's an interesting documentary about a blind American bluesman who travels to Tuva to compete in their annual competition, having taught himself how to sing the kargya earthquake style by listening to recordings. Forget what it's called, but it's a good film if you're looking for any inspiration.

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